Revision

I view my process of revision as very effective. Without revising my papers I would still have the errors that I originally made in my rough drafts. Often times my original drafts have spelling, grammar, and comma mistakes. In my revision I read over my draft multiple times looking for any errors that I have made. I believe that no paper is perfect after the first draft; therefor without the revision process writing would not be as professional as it is today. I believe that revision is making a difference in my writings. Many times I revise my papers myself and then have a peer check over my paper. The revision process is clear to me and I am not having many difficulties revising. The one area in my papers that I believe I can improve on is my thesis statement. The thesis statement should be a strong statement stating what the entire paper is about. When revising I need to strengthen my thesis and make it powerful and enticing to the reader. All of my experiences with revision have been successful. I prefer my papers to be read by multiple peers to get multiple suggestions on how to make my paper more professional. I believe that the more peer editors who read my paper the better, the peers who read and polish up my paper help my in composing my final draft. Although revision is not always the most enjoyable process in creating a successful paper, but it is needed to cut out the errors made in the rough drafts.

Henri de Toulouse-Lautrec

In Henri de Toulouse-Lautrec’s painting of “A women with a black feather boa” Lautrec is depicting how women were seen in the middle nineteen hundreds in Paris. The picture is dark and ominous, describing the features of women at the time. At the time women were seen as dark and mysterious characters. The painter is directing his work at the female gender. He is trying to show women how they are looked upon in society. The genre of this piece is called post impressionism; it is in this genre due to the time it was painted and that it was in France. Lautrec’s stance on his painting is that women should be treated equal in society. He painted the picture so women would see what they were portrayed as and give them a chance to stand up for their rights. In this instance the media of the piece is a painting. In the photo by Lautrec, the women seem to be transparent. This also is a testament of the hardships women were dealing with in the time. The women of this day and age were looked not important and looked past many times as shown in the painting. The painted woman is extremely ugly, ugly enough that the picture is almost gross at first glance. Women years ago were not thought of as beauty symbols as they are today. They often dressed in disturbing clothes such as the woman in the painting. Women were seen as object and of no importance to the community.

No T.V's

A world without television would be a huge change. I do not support the statement that our children would be more educated, healthier, and more independent human beings. I believe the exact opposite actually, I believe that without television children would not retain as much knowledge, and I am not sure how television and health are even related. Many television shows are very informative and teach young kids basic fundamental topics. For example, how many kids have not watched Barney? Nearly every child has watched an episode of Barney when growing up. This show and many others are academic shows and teach many positive principles. Kids that are visual learners may retain more knowledge from sitting down and watching a television channel rather than sitting in a class room. I agree that there are many shows on the TV that are inappropriate and even abusive, but if the child’s shows and amount of TV is monitored the television can be very informational. The only health problem that could develop from television is obesity. This is only possible if the child sits on the couch watching cartoons for numerous hours. I also agree that the amount of television watched in a day should not reach an excessive amount. Watching too much television is not good for a person. With that said i believe that when bored television is a good way to waste time and even learn something new. Many documentaries are very informative, giving info that may not be published elsewhere. Without television the world indeed would be much different but not necessarily for the better.